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枫下拾英 / 乐韵书香 / 花瓣雨系列之 Face creamWhen wrinkles steal the smooth,
I cling to you.
Tittering on my finger,
the age, you whisper.
I flutter cheeks,
and powder a fresh color.
The age blushes
to a sudden retreat.
Age hides,
you win the combat;
Shower later,
still I will surrender.
-annayin(happy heart!);
2004-3-11
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刺！总感觉差了一点，偏偏说不清楚！刺！也许文字的撼动力度？！也许卷绕的层次力度？！也许表达的直指本心？！感觉读一读佛学的书，对你的诗有帮助……
-spine(刺);
2004-3-11
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刺！想起来了！刺！文字和本心太远，震撼的力度在思维中减弱！anyway，极好！
-spine(刺);
2004-3-11
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Right. This poem lack some thoughts. I didn't get any good inspire yet.
-annayin(happy heart!);
2004-3-11
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